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that was so awesome beyond words. it sounds ultra cool. i love it.
This poem goes out ot all those who oughta be
going with the flow, instead of plotting methodically
on ways to put pressure those they hate constantly.
Instead of tryin' to find pure happiness periodically.
Forget about the pain and the sorrow momentarily.
You're looking up too hard at the sky--staring warily.
Don't let yourself get too depressed, 'cause you're scarin' me.
You should be focused on keeping that big smile primarily.
Peace only comes to those who want to manually
make an effort to change their situation annually.
Every year, change makes your path even more challenging.
Prepare for hurdles. Tobu--Err,--Jump! Oops, that was Japanese!
Remember, though it seems that peace has faded from reality,
It's still there, it just comes in between the battling.
When you need them, your friends can be like your calvary.
Don't let the negativity be fuel to quicken your maddening.
Forget about the pain and the sorrow momentarily.
You should be focused on keeping that big smile primarily.
Stand strong...
that was so awesome beyond words. it sounds ultra cool. i love it.
Great work and discrpition totaly rocked me congratz u got a talent, hope you right more dude!
I know... Its crossing the line for me to comment on your work. But, Im taking a chance. I thought this was absolutely the best poem I've ever read from you.
And... Its about damn time you entered in POTM!!! I personally thought you should have submitted for the Tanka theme... You're always doing Haiku, and they are quite simular. You're already kind of seasoned in those types of structure. Not very many people entered last month either... So you could have easily taken it.
Anyway... This is definately a potential winner. May the force be with you.
... Not Ever Again...
LOL, thanks! I figured I should at least give POTM one shot. Y'know, see if I'm prizeworthy. ^_^ I was considering entering the Tanka themed POTM, but thought to myself, "It's one super-long haiku??" And kinda just drifted away. Anywho, thanks for your comments, I'm pleased to see you like my work. And... Aren't you supposed to be out of town? Why are you doing something you could've easily done from home? LOL.Originally Posted by Peach_follows
Peach_follows (Dec 14, 2007)
I like it Sprout definitely one of the best of read!!!
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