Thoughts on Time {POTM Entry for Nov. 07}

Mechazawa · Nov 29, 2007, 08:50 PM

Thoughts on Time

The Morning

Distaste for morning
Too bright, too early, too much
Sand still in my eyes
Birds sing sour notes
Waking irritations yawn.

The Past

Constantly haunting
For one moment’s peace denied
Self made chains bind
Past, unshakeable shadows
Old irritations, sadness.

Time

Please, make up your mind
Either too fast, or too slow
Always uncaring
Watching time’s hands wave goodbye
Tick-tock irritations, stress.

*The White Wolf* · Dec 10, 2007, 07:55 PM

"Irritation".

You like that word, mecha?

Great poem, I just wish you hadn't used that word so much.

ilovenaruto11 · Dec 27, 2007, 01:03 PM

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*Legend* · Jan 01, 2008, 11:06 PM

Just came in to check the poem out since I saw the POTM winner thread. I am not very good with poems so I didn't get the first part of it, but "The Past" and "Time" is so true and hits home with me very much.

Mechazawa · Jan 02, 2008, 02:15 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Legend

Just came in to check the poem out since I saw the POTM winner thread. I am not very good with poems so I didn't get the first part of it, but "The Past" and "Time" is so true and hits home with me very much.

Well the whole thing is about time, I guess I could've went with it being about the past present or future. The whole idea is that time is irritating though, and I currently have no gripe with the present or future.

So I went with times that bother me the most, and time itself. I'm not a morning person, I don't like birds singing or anything that has to do with morning. That's the point behind the first one, that its just another irritations caused by time. Everyone that isn't a morning person can agree to that.

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The White Wolf The Real Batgirl. Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,559 Thanks: 2 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts Credits: 9,349	Re: Thoughts on Time {POTM Entry for Nov. 07} "Irritation". You like that word, mecha? Great poem, I just wish you hadn't used that word so much. __________________
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ilovenaruto11 Newbie Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: ny Posts: 41 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,886	Re: Thoughts on Time {POTM Entry for Nov. 07} the pome you rought was awsome and so cool you should right more pomes on here i would love to read them you have a great talent so keep it up and im shure one day something rely good will happen smiles good job __________________ you will always find that certain someone to make you feel special and important and good about yourself. all you need to do is believe. made by jazzy95
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Legend Banned Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Sharks Territory Posts: 4,458 Thanks: 37 Thanked 43 Times in 41 Posts Credits: 70,296	Re: Thoughts on Time {POTM Entry for Nov. 07} Just came in to check the poem out since I saw the POTM winner thread. I am not very good with poems so I didn't get the first part of it, but "The Past" and "Time" is so true and hits home with me very much. __________________
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