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    Trying to Write a Poem

    All right . . . love poem, now. What can I say? She is my MUSE. If you don't know who William Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson (*gag*), and e.e. cummings are, do a google search and feel UTTER SHAME! Just kidding. (Most of the poem is modelled after Cummings' revolutionary style; it is a bit different, just to warn you.)

    Trying to Write a Poem - for Kelly:

    I'm Shakespeare on a good day,
    (I'm Dickinson on a bad one),
    But one thought of you and suddenly I'm

    e.e. cummings

    my pencil . . . skittering out of control, graphite
    smudges on my thumb
    grammar unheeded - a deadly sin in my book

    all is
    replaced

    by the memory of your elusive


    smile.

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    Trying to Write a Poem

    That was really good divine_punishment!!

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    Re: Trying to Write a Poem

    Quote Originally Posted by tora_tora_yatta View Post
    That was really good divine_punishment!!
    Thanks. I don't know why I suddenly felt the urge to write like Cummings . . . I mean, I used to correct the grammar in his work.

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    Re: Trying to Write a Poem

    wow.. ^^ thats so sweet... (look at me sounding like a girl xD) ^^ nice nice
    i like it.. keep up the good work and i wanna see more of urs..

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    Re: Trying to Write a Poem

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    wow.. ^^ thats so sweet... (look at me sounding like a girl xD) ^^ nice nice
    i like it.. keep up the good work and i wanna see more of urs..
    Read "Kelly's Song." I like it better than this one. The grammar is far less unsightly.

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    Re: Trying to Write a Poem

    This'd look killer with a picture in it. One of a girl smiling or something, with the words/sentences placed at varied points...

    Lovely, lovely!
    the love you withhold is the pain you carry.

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    Re: Trying to Write a Poem

    Since you submitted this one for POTM, I'm going to delete it from the general poetry area. POTM entries are open for comment, so you don't need to post it anywhere else. And just this once, I'll be kind and move your comments as well.
    sig by Pyro Psycho

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    Re: Trying to Write a Poem

    i'm actually used to seeing it, iread all poetry and have an anthology of my own being published so it's not that different, although i prefer the victorian style and acbd format the poems isn't that bad cheers
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