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    The World’s Most Beautiful

    The World’s Most Beautiful

    I’d give anything to see the sun set on the horizon,
    I’d do anything to gaze at a full moon in the night sky;
    Even a rainbow would make me smile,
    And I’d love to swim in crystal clear waters
    Of an untouched sea;
    Sometimes I’ll see a shooting star,
    And try to gaze from afar,
    All the diamonds in the night sky;
    The mist on the mountains is breathtaking,
    As is walking in rainforest;
    To see cascading waterfalls I’d do anything for,
    As to stand on the highest peak in the world,
    And look at the sights below;
    I’d love to soar on wings above the clouds,
    Across the bluest skies;
    I’d do anything to see
    All the beautiful things in the world,
    Like a red rose blooming in the Sahara,
    Like a river twisting through a dusty land,
    All the beautiful things in the world;

    But I also know I am looking at
    The world’s most beautiful creation,
    Every time you smile,
    And every time I look into your eyes.

    Well...what do you people think about it?
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    Re: The World’s Most Beautiful

    Rhyming is off, I think you'll get better over time though. Beyond that I loved the choice of words you used. Work more on poems and you'll get better.

    "All the diamonds in the night sky;
    The mist on the mountains is breathtaking,
    As is walking in rainforest;"

    That is good. Work on rhyming as I mentioned before Ok?^^
    Yeah, Bye.

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