Rhyming is off, I think you'll get better over time though. Beyond that I loved the choice of words you used. Work more on poems and you'll get better.
"All the diamonds in the night sky;
The mist on the mountains is breathtaking,
As is walking in rainforest;"
That is good. Work on rhyming as I mentioned before Ok?^^


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