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Well this poem is really a shoe-in for that contest....
and I really like the way it comes together....
all in all a really good poem, give yourself a pat on the back.
Well done Inuruto, Well done.
Your Eyes Tell Me You're Dying Inside
Frustration, weariness, hurt, pain, sorrow
That's what I see in your eyes
Tears speak when you cry
Yours letting me know you're dead inside
Saying HELP I want to be alive
Let Me
Don't be afraid I'm here
I'm here to catch your every tear
Your every tear that appears
Let me love you afar and near
Let me love you unconditionally My Dear
Give You My Heart
My heart I will give
Just so that you're able to live
Please don't worry about me
Cause without you my heart wouldn't beat
Let us LIVE, LOVE, DIE together happily
Last edited by Inuruto; Nov 23, 2007 at 12:43 AM.
The heart can't lie... Truth is... I love you!!!
Well this poem is really a shoe-in for that contest....
and I really like the way it comes together....
all in all a really good poem, give yourself a pat on the back.
Well done Inuruto, Well done.
Y'know.... I luv you... And that is why Im giving you this heads up. I think that 5,7,5,7,7 Is for a syllabol (sp?) count. NOT a word count. Example: Ethnocentrism... 1 word, but 5 syllabols. And that one word alone could start off a tanka.
I don't think this poem, as is, will qualify. However the concept is dope! And Overall its beautiful work! ... So I hope you edit.
Last edited by Peach_follows; Nov 24, 2007 at 09:08 AM.
... Not Ever Again...
The words are really sweet and they really touched my heart.......
Very nicely done!!!!
DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON
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