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    Guy in the bus {04/25}

    And there he is,
    As always on time,
    At 6 p.m.
    On the bus to Kolrein

    I raise my head
    As he passes me by
    And his eyes meet mine
    As if telling me hi!

    My stop is here
    So I crawl out the door
    And our eyes meet again
    As the rain starts to pour.

    ***

    Again I’m here
    Just waiting for him
    And there he comes…
    With a girl oh so slim.

    I start to breath hard
    For tears in my eyes
    And this time leaving
    I’m telling goodbyes.

    Still the story doesn’t end
    For we meet again
    And this time I talk
    As I should have done then.

    With not thinking too much
    I ask to him
    For how he is
    And his girl oh so slim…

    Not wondering why
    He told about Sam
    To the girl from the bus
    At 6 p.m.

    “Sam’s my sister from Pert,”
    Smiling he said,
    “And if you’re wondering too
    My name is Ed.”

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Guy in the bus {04/25}

    Awwwww.....How cool of the poem is this. Its a great poem. You should make more. Your real good at this to me.
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    Re: Guy in the bus {04/25}

    Well... yeah... I like this one too, the other poems I wrote are nothing special... Shouldn't have even put them!
    Thank you very much KuwiRules for the coment very nice of you!!! Hugs!
    Last edited by Lasura; Apr 25, 2007 at 09:36 PM.

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    Re: Guy in the bus {04/25}

    aaw thats a sweet poem i like it. it all turned out good. i smiled at the end
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    Re: Guy in the bus {04/25}

    Sweet!
    xD
    It's funny even though it's not a real incident, and also you could've described the guy more or could've said for how long have you known him for. You know...

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    Re: Guy in the bus {04/25}

    Thank you Rave_Grip!
    Yeh, maybe I shoud have described him better, but actually he's ment to be a stranger, the lyrical "me" knows him not.

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Guy in the bus {04/25}

    Nice poem it had me thinking she was his girlfriend and he didn't like fat girls,but at the end it turned out to be his sister and he introduced her and himself to you eventhough I figured you already knew him which gave the story a good twist.
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    Re: Guy in the bus {04/25}

    Thank you all, I'm happy to hear you liked it and that it made you smile and that you liked the idea!!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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