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    Life's Words {4/23}

    Life's Words

    Who am I?
    Can you not see?

    I am the child running along side the street.
    I am the woman who buys her groceries.
    I am the man who bakes the bread.


    Where am I?
    Can you not feel?

    I am the wind that blows into your hair.
    I am the cake that satisfies your tastebuds,
    every so lightly.
    I am the needle that pierces into your skin.


    What am I?
    Can you not hear?

    I am the lone wolf that howls to the moon.
    I am the birds flying towards the east.
    I am the angry water that fills the oceans.


    I am life itself, the very existance of humanity and nature.
    I am the advantage you take of an everyday.
    I am your loss.

    I am your loss.


    *Tried a different way of going about poetry. Hope you enjoyed.
    Last edited by The White Wolf; Apr 23, 2007 at 05:30 PM. Reason: Edit title to correct brackets

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    Re: Life's Words[4/23]

    Wow... much better than mine.. @.@ darn.. my hope of winning this went into the trash... @.@ xD

    But i kinda havin a prob in understanding it though... :/ sheesh im too dumb maybe.. ~.~

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    Re: Life's Words[4/23]

    No, it is abstract. Maybe other members might have some trouble reading it. It's all right, Ray-kun! I just hope at least one person will understand the meaning of this poem. If they do, then I will feel at ease.

    And don't say such things! Your poem was very nice!
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    Re: Life's Words[4/23]

    I actually like the repetition. It's natural and it doesnt seem forced.
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    Re: Life's Words[4/23]

    Nice poem and well written. I like your penguin pic it's cute.
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    Re: Life's Words[4/23]

    I really adore this one!!! You've done a wonderful job describing yourselfe!!! makes me imagine all the things you mention...

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