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    Short One {5/15}

    I have a really realy short one, but I though that it was decent...I dont know it this is accepted but heres a try...

    Violent eyes,
    and broken noses,
    along with the faint scent of roses
    I've seen all you here before at the rise and the fall, lets go down and ring the bell at the Levity Ball.

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    Re: Short One {5/15}

    Wow this a short one but a good one as well. I like it since its short and good. I bet it would of been good long too oh well hope to see more in the future!
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    Re: Short One {5/15}

    Quote Originally Posted by ConradGuravitch103 View Post
    I have a really realy short one, but I though that it was decent...I dont know it this is accepted but heres a try...

    Violent eyes,
    and broken noses,
    along with the faint scent of roses
    You could call that one a haiku!
    I like this poem of yours quite well, the scene you're creating is really interesting, the only tihng I don't like a lot is the second line, it's somehow too... simple, it makes me smile, though if it was your aim, then I understand...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Short One {5/15}

    Gah, intense...it has a fascinating impact on you even though it's length. I love it and you!

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