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    Special Place{7/11}

    All my hapiness
    All my joy
    Is held within
    One special place

    I don't know where
    All I know is that
    It's not within me
    Not in me at all

    Once I find that place
    I'll never lose it again
    Like I did before
    What a mistake that was

    All I feel inside me
    Is sadness and hatred
    I have to find the place soon
    Or my soul will be dead
    **************
    Then I see light
    The warmth of hapiness
    A hand lifting me up
    Into your arms

    My light is you
    My sadness vanished
    I love you my dear
    And I'll never let you go.....
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    Oh my I hope it wins.....
    Last edited by Akura13; Jul 11, 2007 at 04:38 PM. Reason: okay, THERE!!!!!



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    Re: Special Place{7/11}

    This is a wonderful poem Akura... best of what I've read from you 'till now... I can't find a reason why it couldn't win...
    The only thing I don't like is the time flow... it's broken in the place where you start to talk about when you find that special place... it kind off surprised me... maybe the poem would be more enjoyable (not that it's not now! no!) if you put stars before the sixth stranza- just for people understand that something new is ment to be comming... I think even this little fix would do ^^

    But it's great the same... I like it very much.. nice work Akura!!!

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    Re: Special Place{7/11}

    ooooOOOOoooo Very very deep.Very very good also.I hope it wins too.

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    Re: Special Place{7/11}

    I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I really do!!!!!! It's so romantic and wonderful to read! I love it!!!!!!!!! I hope to see more!
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    Re: Special Place{7/11}

    Thank you all so much!!! And like that Lasura????? I'm always open for suggestions!!!!!



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    Re: Special Place{7/11}

    OMG!! Sorry Akura!!! I should go back to first class where they teched how to count... I ment before the fifth stranza... so sorry ^^ but yea... like that ^^ It'd help me to understand what's going on ^^

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    Re: Special Place{7/11}

    Okay now is that right Lasura????? gee i really do hope it wins!



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    Re: Special Place{7/11}

    Quote Originally Posted by Akura13 View Post
    Okay now is that right Lasura????? gee i really do hope it wins!
    I know... it's the same with me... I'm talking 'bout SOTW though... I just get fed up with getting only one vote, so I try harder this time... I've made three sigs already... I hope I get some votes this time. lol

    Yea... it's alright now ^^ for me

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