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    Yesterday I went for a walk... {06/21}

    Yesterday I was at the dam.
    I sat on its walls and watched the water flow by
    I hit my hands at its feet and screamed out my fear
    …I laid my head on its old shoulders and cried away my pain …

    Yesterday I sat at the feet of the old apple tree in my garden.
    I leaned my back at its trunk and watched the sun set,
    I played with the butterflies and forgot my sadness,
    I soaked my feet in the grass and mother earth comforted me…

    Yesterday I walked the streets of my hometown
    I put on my shoes to guard my feet from the flinders of the past,
    I met my ex and smiled at last at what he had done,
    I saw a couple swinging- holding hands and thought: “That is forever…”

    Yesterday I entered my home and knew we’ll be ok.

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Yesterday I went for a walk... {06/21}

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    Yesterday I was at the dam.
    I sat on its walls and watched the water flow by
    I hit my hands at its feet and screamed out my fear
    …I laid my head on its old shoulders and cried away my pain …

    Yesterday I sat at the feet of the old apple tree in my garden.
    I leaned my back at its trunk and watched the sun set,
    I played with the butterflies and forgot my sadness,
    I soaked my feet in the grass and mother earth comforted me…

    Yesterday I walked the streets of my hometown
    I put on my shoes to guard my feet from the flinders of the past,
    I met my ex and smiled at last at what he had done,
    I saw a couple swinging- holding hands and thought: “That is forever…”

    Yesterday I entered my home and knew we’ll be ok.

    GREAT LASURA!!!!!! REALLY AMAZING!!!!! It's so sad in a way but happy as well so I hope to see more! Two thumbs up for yah!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: Yesterday I went for a walk... {06/21}

    Thank You Kuwi!! ^^ I'm happy to hear you like it!!! And you even say it's great!!! Yay!!!! ^^ I thought it seems uncompleted, but couldn't figure out how to make it more... complete... ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    Thank You Kuwi!! ^^ I'm happy to hear you like it!!! And you even say it's great!!! Yay!!!! ^^ I thought it seems uncompleted, but couldn't figure out how to make it more... complete... ^^
    It seems pretty complete to me. ^_^

    Awesome work, Larua! It's great that you use your environment as subject matter and give it a purpose. I like this poem alot. I'm looking forward to more like this one.


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    Re: Yesterday I went for a walk... {06/21}

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    Thank You Kuwi!! ^^ I'm happy to hear you like it!!! And you even say it's great!!! Yay!!!! ^^ I thought it seems uncompleted, but couldn't figure out how to make it more... complete... ^^
    Well it was still great os no problem on that! It was still amazing! So YEAH LASURA!!!!!!! (Claps)
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    ^^ Thank You again Kuwi *bows*

    And thank You Sprout... well... this is not as good as just writting about a shirt, it took the whole day of walking around to write this one... ^^ I'm glad you like it!!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Yesterday I went for a walk... {06/21}

    Hmm.. @.@ nice...happy to know that u have ur ways on releasing ur stress..
    and anger and stuff... ^^ sheesh...all i got is my little "sanctuary" *laughs*

    Good job ~! I wanna see more of ur work~! ^^

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    Re: Yesterday I went for a walk... {06/21}

    Lovely poem there, Lasura. The way you ended it felt as if you've woken up with a different view of the world, .. what a meaningful walk indeed Very positive vibe, nice descriptions. Great job

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