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    2 fights, one mind....

    The pain in my mind,
    what am I to do.
    I can't get over the fact,
    I'm being split in two.

    I can't take the arguing,
    The fighting across the hall.
    I don't want any of this now,
    I don't want any of it AT ALL!!!

    My sister's boyfriend is yelling at her,
    And I can't interviene.
    I'll never get over the fact that,
    There is no more love for these walls or in between.

    The fight is more than in the room,
    But there also lingers love troubles in my mind as well.
    I want to talk to my love and tell her that,
    I almost called a stranger by her name after all.

    Someone I've never met before and I yell,
    Stopping myself before I say "Hey Kristal".
    I saw her and we talked a moment then she left,
    I'll never see her again and heart again will fizzle.

    I been waiting for the uproar to die down,
    I think it has, but I'm not sure for how long.
    My mind is still plagued by the dismal fact that,
    I have to go through more crap to be with my sis, to get along.

    Waiding in chin deep water,
    One more wrong step and i will drown.
    I just wanted the madness to stop for a change,
    WHY CAN'T I LIVE A NORMAL LIFE ONE TIME AROUND!!!!!!

    The fight has stopped, but my pain lingers still,
    I'll never get through MY pain now.
    My sister is over her pain again mine still shoot at me,
    I wish I had a chance to figure MY pain out.

    Now the insanity has increased dramatically,
    It's now more than ever, ten fold.
    I've never been able to get over love and now twice as wounded,
    I can't talk to the obsession of mine, by myself I am being told.

    I have no way to reach her, and my pains reaching it peak,
    And I'm not to sure if I'll make the weekend.
    I have so much that I need to let out, I hope this helps,
    Cause is it doesn't, 2 fights I fought, 0 times I did win.

    By: Justin McCormick (K' Heart)

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Wow... that was something! I like how you worded the last sentence.

    Ver-ry ni-ce.

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    In the last stanzas too many syllables. But great emotion. Check for spelling errors more often. Great job.
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    Thanks Kasai, but I WAS in the middle of that fight. Next time I'll do better...

    J

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Lol. I understand Justin. I myself enjoyed the poem immensely.
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