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    Alone

    I wrote this poem right after i departed from my loved one. She went away to far away places just because his father and well sadness made me write this:

    Alone

    Purity once had a name,
    And beauty once had a face.
    Life once had a meaning,
    And once I was safe.
    Once there was freedom,
    And once I could laugh.
    Happiness once was alive,
    And once I had another half.
    Once I shared her love,
    Once I was by her side,
    Once I felt I fitted,
    So quickly that died.
    Her grace so great,
    Her beauty so vast,
    All I ever wanted,
    Was for it to last.
    Fate maybe had another plan,
    Or maybe she had another love,
    But it all fell apart,
    The hand too big for the glove.
    Now it's all died away,
    Happiness, joy, love; all memories.
    Now I walk alone in this dark, dark world,
    With no light to guide my way.
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    very sad and emotional poem, its quite nice though. I like

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    not "quite nice"; its great! good job, good imagery, good emotion! Nice job

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    great job! seems like you have suffer a bit.

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    very nice...it speaks to me....
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    ,>_<, sad but true nice work there good job ,>_<,

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    yay Kikinaki

    awsome poem, i can really capture the feeling you felt and it connected with me cause i can picture myself writing something liek that, good job.

    well i enjoy your work. ^5

    -simple

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    It seems so... delicate. I loved it, absolutely loved it. :] good luck on your journey ahead. dont worry. :]

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