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    alone(P)

    My chest is Ripped Apart.
    The Flesh on my Body Burns.
    Fragile mind in a Storm of Problems.
    Life Lost in my heart.
    Gasps of air break a sweat.
    Blinked in a world Without you.

    -simple

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    short but very effective, nice one!

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    Just like your nick states, simple and good. Well done
    Last edited by Kikinaki; May 01, 2005 at 04:49 PM.

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    That was rather scary, I mean the "My chest ripped apart" thing. Makes me think of something rather grotesque. Short, and descriptive. Nice work.

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    Greetings,

    I just wanna thank you all for your comments, and im glad you like my work for its just my emotion.

    I will post more but it seems i only write when somethine in life hits me hard.


    -simple

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    baby,
    simple,
    dear,
    you had a broken heart, if you need me, ill bring the glue.
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    aw! I liked it! short, emotion, descriptive; very, very good.
    "I never stopped loving you, I just stopped letting it show."
    -Unknown

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    i liked and it was emotion

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