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    Ask and Cry [Poem]

    Ask and cry

    Why.
    They say it
    Quick response to their fault
    Default
    To the nature of their way
    Lacking
    Experience and trust
    Blindly thrusting
    Their minds into it
    Not knowing it’s the flame
    That burns them so

    Cooling
    Not through the words
    The mediums
    Misconception
    Misinterpretation
    Where they scream and shout
    Rhyme and sing
    No
    It burns them to
    With the desires
    To speak
    Something that can’t be said

    We pretend
    Like something is communicated
    Felt
    Seen
    Heard
    Released
    But no
    No lessons learned
    We lack the understanding
    To know
    What not to do

    Relations
    As confined
    As a 9 letter word
    As oily as freedom
    And as pointless as
    You

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    This poem makes me feel woozy

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    Like always, a great one.

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    great stuff Jao. Really well done

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    nice work good job

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    Great work, nice job, sweet!

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    ~marvelous work~
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    Thank you all for your comments. It was an anti-poem poem..Which is ironic for me but whatever. My drive to write has been low for so long.

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