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    Beneath her Eyes

    Beneath her Eyes........

    So much pain
    too much to take
    a girl who is dying
    in a world thats fake
    and no one heard
    or saw her cries
    in the midst of darkness
    they all were blind
    she walked alone
    on a dark street
    a mistake to humanity
    she felt incomplete
    her shadows haunted
    and people ran away
    if only they noticed
    she might have stayed
    A rope awaited her
    to steal her last breath
    if her life wasnt damaged
    she wouldnt taste death
    she never meant to hide it
    although she always tried
    if only people noticed
    the pain beneath her eyes....

    “You want to live—but do you know how to live? You are scared of dying—and, tell me, is the kind of life you lead really any different from being dead?”

    ~ Seneca

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    oh... Its beautiful! I love it so much. perfect! just perfect!

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    Kikinaki,

    VERY WELLL WRITTEN,
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    very true, i pray for the girl who took the rope.
    for we really live in a dream.

    -simple

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    very nice..I write similar poems...Urs r very angst and yet they show meaning

    Brent

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    i rate that peom the best and it was perfect

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    wow ... sounds like you can really read emotions, if not anyone elses, at least you own and i love the quote at the end. really makes ya think.............
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