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    )Blackness(

    I awake,
    my eyes open,
    but they percieve,
    only darkness.
    light cannot pierce,
    this dark shell,
    that ensnares me.
    i can't feel,
    it's as if i'm not there.
    i can't see or feel me.
    no one cares either.
    friends pass me,
    and cannot see me,
    but i sense thier passing,
    but cannot feel them.
    nothingness...
    blackness...
    i'm deaf to thier sounds,
    and blinded too.
    i scream and hear nothing.
    i am muted by,
    this black cave.
    i cry and no tears come.
    i cannot even get,
    the satisfaction,
    of brokenness.
    i cannot even feel,
    the bed i know,
    i was once in.
    when i slept,
    feels long ago,
    gone....
    that time was forever ago,
    and now i am nothing.
    no sound.
    no sight.
    no feeling.
    no touch.
    no friends now.
    no time.
    no dreams.
    no happiness.
    only one hope left...
    and it's fading...
    slowly...
    fading...
    into...
    ...
    the...
    ...
    dark...
    ...
    ness...............
    ......
    ......
    ......
    forgive.... me............ By Justin McCormick (K' Heart)


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    very deep.
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    nicely written....very nice

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    Wow you live up to your name. Very good work.

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    i like it....very nice poem.....i can relate to the feelings
    white....it seems so pure.....but in reality......it becomes whatever blends with it....

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    Nice choice of title - the poem on the whole conveys the very thought of the blackness, the nothingness and the emptiness felt. Even to one who is not familiar with the feeling, the strong and powerful words makes the reader acquainted with it. I felt trapped somehow just by reading it.

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