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    Thumbs down Blueprint of some new work (p)

    Lost in a Maze
    Crying for the Answer
    Running for truth
    Screaming to Escape
    Sleeping while Awakle

    ------------------------------->

    Born with nothing
    Lost my Something
    Tired of Fighting
    Forgotten Every Cause
    Having no Interest
    Giving it my All
    Drowing in Smoke
    Cloud out my Love

    -------------------------------->

    Exploding Emotion
    Breaking Fall
    Gaining Hate
    Fading Love
    Pumping Stomach
    Hungry Heart

    --------------------------->


    well, for the last one i felt like useing 2 words per bar, cause i wanna try and explain my emotion with such a low amount of words that allow itself to still be powerful.

    but just mixing some to see what i get out of them, its been a bit harder to really write how i feel, thats why i wrote three UNCleaned, just messing around with my words, but all never lie or meant to be read as fake. i write what i mean and speak what i feel.

    -simple

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    Those short lines are very easy to understand IMO. Few edites and lengthening a bit would make a great poem. Good progress!

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    i like the way it all fit together!its like this puzzle im doing... maybe you could help me put all of the pieces together{of the puzzle and my life}im still ans always lovin it!!
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    simlpe good job

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    kool poem dude!!!i would like to write poems as you do!!!!

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