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    Commander Ham Chiefblackhammer is making a name for themselves Chiefblackhammer is making a name for themselves Chiefblackhammer is making a name for themselves Chiefblackhammer's Avatar
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    Bottled Ship

    I gaze into the depths of the sea
    Confounded by the man staring back at me

    Yet I cannot break my stare
    Because my bones seem so bare

    Guided to where the waves wend
    Not able to comprehend

    The things that I see
    Or what has happened to me

    Where did I go wrong
    Not sure of where I belong

    How did I drift away
    Which way did the tides sway

    Constrained by the brutality
    Absent of any vitality

    Yet I drop my sails
    Praying for the heaven’s gails

    But the winds will not blow
    And towards my goal I cannot go

    Is there not even a soul to care
    As I am engulfed by this snare

    Now my end will not be long
    I hear the siren’s song

    To guide me to the man I ought to be
    Yet I drift upon this windless sea

    Deafened by the ship’s wail
    I strive harder but to no avail

    It is then that I realize
    The introduction of my demise

    All my life has been is vanity
    I am lost in this insanity.

    ~BCM~

    I have posted this here before (like the first time we had a poem section) Enjoy!


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    Re: Bottled Ship

    Lost hu? ummm............ I like this one. i got a pic in the mind with this one. So yea good
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    Re: Bottled Ship

    i get what u meen dude. nice

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    Re: Bottled Ship

    Woo! Another great piece, Chief-Sami. Keep up the awesome work!!! I never thought that you were a badass poet. This poem had a great rhythm and flow to it. Nice work with neat symbolism.

    Oh, I kinda get it, I think, of why you entitled this poem as Bottled Ship.

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    coo but i just cant connect to poetry just aint my style but it works for you so keep it up eh
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    Re: Bottled Ship

    Yeah the title makes the whole poem


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    Re: Bottled Ship

    i luv the tittle n the poem....nc job!

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