Bottled Ship

Chiefblackhammer · Mar 23, 2006, 05:54 PM

I gaze into the depths of the sea
Confounded by the man staring back at me

Yet I cannot break my stare
Because my bones seem so bare

Guided to where the waves wend
Not able to comprehend

The things that I see
Or what has happened to me

Where did I go wrong
Not sure of where I belong

How did I drift away
Which way did the tides sway

Constrained by the brutality
Absent of any vitality

Yet I drop my sails
Praying for the heaven’s gails

But the winds will not blow
And towards my goal I cannot go

Is there not even a soul to care
As I am engulfed by this snare

Now my end will not be long
I hear the siren’s song

To guide me to the man I ought to be
Yet I drift upon this windless sea

Deafened by the ship’s wail
I strive harder but to no avail

It is then that I realize
The introduction of my demise

All my life has been is vanity
I am lost in this insanity.
~BCM~

I have posted this here before (like the first time we had a poem section) Enjoy!

*Mr. K* · Mar 23, 2006, 06:01 PM

Lost hu? ummm............ I like this one. i got a pic in the mind with this one. So yea good

*bloodhawk* · Mar 23, 2006, 06:06 PM

i get what u meen dude. nice

kedar · Mar 23, 2006, 06:07 PM

Woo! Another great piece, Chief-Sami. Keep up the awesome work!!! I never thought that you were a badass poet.

This poem had a great rhythm and flow to it. Nice work with neat symbolism.

Oh, I kinda get it, I think, of why you entitled this poem as Bottled Ship.

Captcanada · Mar 23, 2006, 06:13 PM

coo but i just cant connect to poetry just aint my style but it works for you so keep it up eh

Chiefblackhammer · Mar 23, 2006, 06:13 PM

Yeah the title makes the whole poem

elie26 · Mar 24, 2006, 08:08 PM

i luv the tittle n the poem....nc job!

Mar 23, 2006, 05:54 PM	#1 (permalink)
Chiefblackhammer Commander Ham Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Winston Salem, NC Posts: 1,698 Thanks: 4 Thanked 33 Times in 30 Posts Credits: 26,341	Bottled Ship I gaze into the depths of the sea Confounded by the man staring back at me Yet I cannot break my stare Because my bones seem so bare Guided to where the waves wend Not able to comprehend The things that I see Or what has happened to me Where did I go wrong Not sure of where I belong How did I drift away Which way did the tides sway Constrained by the brutality Absent of any vitality Yet I drop my sails Praying for the heaven’s gails But the winds will not blow And towards my goal I cannot go Is there not even a soul to care As I am engulfed by this snare Now my end will not be long I hear the siren’s song To guide me to the man I ought to be Yet I drift upon this windless sea Deafened by the ship’s wail I strive harder but to no avail It is then that I realize The introduction of my demise All my life has been is vanity I am lost in this insanity. ~BCM~ I have posted this here before (like the first time we had a poem section) Enjoy! __________________ *BUY MY ANIME COLLECTION* \|Hammer's Blog\|\|~AnimeVector~\|\|Hammer's Poetry\|
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Mr. K THUMBSUCKING ADDICTION Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Alaska Posts: 1,268 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 3,359	Re: Bottled Ship Lost hu? ummm............ I like this one. i got a pic in the mind with this one. So yea good __________________ ≥°≤ [?] █▓▒░░▒▓█ [?] ≥°≤ ◕ ◡ ◕;;;;[?]
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bloodhawk im a ninja-u cant c me Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: some where Posts: 1,176 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 298	Re: Bottled Ship i get what u meen dude. nice __________________ IM BACK
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kedar Warrior Monk Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Monk Society Posts: 2,971 Thanks: 3 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts Credits: 17,275	Re: Bottled Ship Woo! Another great piece, Chief-Sami. Keep up the awesome work!!! I never thought that you were a badass poet. This poem had a great rhythm and flow to it. Nice work with neat symbolism. Oh, I kinda get it, I think, of why you entitled this poem as Bottled Ship. __________________
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Captcanada Newbie Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: well this could be a stretch but i think im in a house Posts: 95 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Re: Bottled Ship coo but i just cant connect to poetry just aint my style but it works for you so keep it up eh __________________ OH CANADA MY HOME AND NATIVE LAND!!! *although i live in NOR CAL To all u Rockers out there... Rock on AO Fan Clan
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Chiefblackhammer Commander Ham Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Winston Salem, NC Posts: 1,698 Thanks: 4 Thanked 33 Times in 30 Posts Credits: 26,341	Re: Bottled Ship Yeah the title makes the whole poem __________________ *BUY MY ANIME COLLECTION* \|Hammer's Blog\|\|~AnimeVector~\|\|Hammer's Poetry\|
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elie26 Elie Jelly Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Hell is an understatement Posts: 608 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 2,051	Re: Bottled Ship i luv the tittle n the poem....nc job! __________________
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