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    cool peom title "Metaphors"

    I see myself as a bird on a wire
    resting on the edge of my sanity
    Hearing a song play over and over again
    Wondering why you have forsaken me
    Why have you made me feel unworthy


    I see myself between a rock and a hard place
    Wondering how I can still love the sight of you
    Wondering why I wait for you to accept me
    Yet still I wonder what is wrong with me
    Do I still love you to my very core?


    I see myself riding off into the sunset
    Your there on that horse with me
    I wonder where we are going
    I wonder If I really care
    I wonder If I will get hurt again


    I see myself as an ant under a microscope
    Every one is watching my every move
    As I hum the song over in ny mind
    "Why have you forsaken me, In your arms forsaken me"
    And I wonder if I will get hurt again.

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    cool poem

    that is cool but sad I dont like sad poems

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    That was good. It was nice to read. Sad, but nice to read.

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    I think many people can relate to the poem's theme, (or maybe not). Anyways, the theme is nicely expressed through the "metaphors", further showing the poet's creativity and originality, which is what a poem really should be about besides showing the poet's heart, which can also be seen in the poem. Nice work of art, but perhaps, can you find a more suitable title for such a wonderful theme, I mean, I love sad poems, and I think yours is great! Maybe you can add more depth to your title to make it more compelling.

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