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May 31, 2005, 12:16 AM
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| Newbie  | drunk(p) Im your demon, I am hell, Come Closer, I'll show you Light, Bring your Life, So i can shine, Be my sky, And i will Fly, Feel no Pain, Brings me Shame, In the Shadows, Is where i Hide, -simple -------------------------------------------------please -----------------------------------------comments -------------------------will ----------be ----aprecriated -thank you, Last edited by simple; May 31, 2005 at 01:14 AM. |
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Jun 01, 2005, 08:49 PM
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| new piks in mem gallery  |  ohhhhh baby- makes you sound evil, but in one of those'i want to know more' sences..........very interesting and well writen!! *get back online!!!*
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Jun 02, 2005, 06:44 PM
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 Credits: 110 | Well, its a nice poem none the less, but I have a question. Did you mean for some lines to rhyme and others not? That's the only thing that I saw wrong : ) |
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Jun 02, 2005, 07:19 PM
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Credits: 11,776 | not all poems have to rhyme some have patterns like the number of syllables or the sounds of certain words some are simply free verse when it comes to true poetry, you don't restrict your work on the rules of others you make your own and you give birth to it with your heart and your soul anyway... my ranting set aside... that was a nice poem I liked it [-_-] Ih
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Jun 02, 2005, 07:22 PM
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Credits: 110 | I'm not saying that all poems had to rhyme, I was just pointing out that he had some verses rhyming and others not. That's not a common pattern for poetry : ) Last edited by Aya Makatokki; Jun 02, 2005 at 07:25 PM. Reason: Spelling Error |
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