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    Forgiveness

    Forgiveness

    The dreams you dream
    are merely images
    of a darkened soul
    inflicting pain on me.
    Drown your acceptance
    and believe in me.
    The power of love
    is all I need.
    The warmth of your touch
    the motion, the feel
    entirely of your heartbeat.
    Do you love?
    Are you free?
    Can you let go of
    all those secluded worries?
    I love your compassion
    I can hear your heart beat for another,
    to love you like I do.
    Why won't you realize
    my love is for you
    I understand you want to leave
    and I will release you.
    But let it be known
    it was only Love for you
    I have ever shown

    Love can sometimes be magic.
    But magic can sometimes... just be an illusion

    -Javan

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    Good one, i really think that this is well put and though provoking. well done....

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    Woah... I agree with narrator all the way. Provoking, indeed. Love how each line is filled with emotion.

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    ...yeah...

    I liked it...It was nice , it was a change from free verse yet i like both styles(i personally do free verse)...Ur poetry could easially be turned into a good song...

    Brent
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    I am simply me.


    Brent

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    if you put that way but , the peom is cool

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    nice poem about love dude!!!keep it up man!!!

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    Quote Originally Posted by ketaro
    nice poem about love dude!!!keep it up man!!!
    are you a peom writer

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    good job babe, very well planned and i must say, i love freeform and i have to say if you can write it well, you truely have a gift.
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