Results 1 to 5 of 5

Thread: Goodbye Love.... By: K' Heart

  1. #1
    Otaku MuMu Champion Shade/K' Heart may be famous one day Shade/K' Heart may be famous one day Shade/K' Heart's Avatar
    Join Date
    Oct 2004
    Location
    I am always near...
    Posts
    417
    Thanks
    10
    Thanked 13 Times in 11 Posts

    Goodbye Love.... By: K' Heart

    I'd say goodbye my love, but never were you to me,
    My love that I wanted so desperately.

    I just wanted a chance to prove to you,
    That my heart is real,
    And my soul so true.

    No one has been in my shoes before,
    And no one will,
    Have I died,
    Will I be another's kill?

    When will the pain stop,
    I want my relief,
    Please no more grief.

    I just wanted a chance to shine,
    But I won't do anything this time.

    Let me be and let me go,
    I just wanted to feel loved,
    Doesn't anyone know?

    So my love... my infatuation,
    I must leave you now,
    Because of my situation.

    I just wish you could understand,
    That never have I ever felt like a true man.

    Forgive me for being so down,
    So unforgiving, so blue.
    I just wanted a chance to be with you.

    You’ve taken over my heart,
    Never is it mine anymore,
    I don’t care though it now leaves me sore.

    I just wish that I’d find someone someday,
    Because you can’t love me today.

    So now I may say my Adu,
    Just remember I will always love you….

    Goodbye Love…………. (I depart),
    (Screaming from a distance),
    YOU’LL ALWAYS BE IN MY HEART!!!!!

    ;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;; ;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;
    ;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;; ;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;

    By: Justin McCormick (K‘ Heart)

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

  2. #2
    PiNk HaIr FaNaTiC Boo45 may be famous one day Boo45 may be famous one day Boo45's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2004
    Location
    I live in a trashcan
    Posts
    715
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts
    Awwww such a nice little poem ^^...im pretty sure that what u say is pure in your heart...i jus hope you have a better future than you have now..i really wish to you the best of luck ;D

  3. #3
    Domme Kasai may be famous one day Kasai may be famous one day Kasai's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2004
    Location
    Florida
    Posts
    2,736
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts
    You love to rhyme dont you? I think this poem is beautiful. But I want you to try a free verse poem. I think youd be perfect for it.
    Seduced by Flesh


  4. #4
    Otaku MuMu Champion Shade/K' Heart may be famous one day Shade/K' Heart may be famous one day Shade/K' Heart's Avatar
    Join Date
    Oct 2004
    Location
    I am always near...
    Posts
    417
    Thanks
    10
    Thanked 13 Times in 11 Posts
    Yeah I like to rhyme, sometimes I rhyme and don't mean to. I'll try that next time, and thanks again Kasai.

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

  5. #5
    Domme Kasai may be famous one day Kasai may be famous one day Kasai's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2004
    Location
    Florida
    Posts
    2,736
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts
    You're welcome. I know lots of writers never appreciate critique. I'm glad you take to mine so well.
    Seduced by Flesh


Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts