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Old May 23, 2005, 10:55 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Heaven

As you sit across from me
I notice my own Decadentcy
That has made me a refugee
Then your wonderous eyes fall upon me
I want to look away but I can't
As my mind raves and rants
You stand up and walk on over
And my ears kick up like Red Rover
And my heart melts like the chocolate of Stover
You sit down beside me and slide your chair closer
I turn to you and I can not Speak
You turn away and the outcome looks leak
So I muster my strength and without warning
I kiss you so I can end my inner mourning

Then I wake to a grey morning
Just another god damn dream
I wish I could break the seam
Between what we call reality
And my dreams which I call heaven

I miss you Ashley
And I'll never forget Thee.


Tell me what you think of it. I like how I used Russell Stover seeing as Russell happens to be the name given to me by my mother and father.
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Old May 23, 2005, 01:29 PM   #2 (permalink)
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i like it, it's sad. and i find it also seems to calm me.
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Old May 23, 2005, 01:45 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Teases you about loving Ashley. j/k

Nice poem, I'm not really much for sad love poems. It's well written though, for the most part.

One question though, did you mean bleak instead of leak?

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Old May 23, 2005, 01:48 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Its a sad story just like the ones I write in my spare time. Just like the stories I write it is also a good one. Well not as good as my little make believe stories but as far as true stories go it is good.
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So is the poem about a girl named Ashely, or did you just use that name because it went along with the poem?
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Old May 30, 2005, 10:06 AM   #6 (permalink)
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kool poem and keep up with the work
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Old May 30, 2005, 10:58 AM   #7 (permalink)
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wow dude that poem rocks!!!!! keep it up man!!!
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