Hollow (poem)

T Elocin · Apr 21, 2005, 01:34 PM

This vacantness within me
Is eating at my soul
No longer do I care or love
No longer am I whole
Emptiness fills my heart
As 'nothing' rips my soul apart
This hollow shell that holds my name
Has no feelings; has no shame
By now, I surly have no doubt
I'm dying from the inside out.
The beast is only in my head
Yet, easily rips me to a shread
Tattered, broken, but still empty I lay...
I'll stay silent, and hollow for all my days.......

*esthered* · Apr 21, 2005, 01:36 PM

Fantastic!! Wow. You know what, I totally have respect for people like you who can depict sadness so wonderfully. I love it, and I assure you I totally understand the meaning of your poem. This is great stuff! :]

*dark angel swordsman* · Apr 21, 2005, 01:42 PM

wow its so beautiful T.T

Shade/K' Heart · Apr 21, 2005, 05:11 PM

Very nice... I hope if your hurting that you get better soon.

T Elocin · Apr 21, 2005, 05:45 PM

Gee; thanks guys! Your comments make me feel better to know that someone likes my poetry

(No one at school gets me)

*narrator* · Apr 21, 2005, 06:24 PM

just keep your head up and your spirit high.

very nice writing.

*deidre_the_goddess* · Apr 23, 2005, 07:40 AM

nice job!!!
its so nice reading your
wonderful poems^_^...

Apr 21, 2005, 01:34 PM	#1 (permalink)
T Elocin Newbie Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Virginia, US Posts: 92 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Hollow (poem) This vacantness within me Is eating at my soul No longer do I care or love No longer am I whole Emptiness fills my heart As 'nothing' rips my soul apart This hollow shell that holds my name Has no feelings; has no shame By now, I surly have no doubt I'm dying from the inside out. The beast is only in my head Yet, easily rips me to a shread Tattered, broken, but still empty I lay... I'll stay silent, and hollow for all my days.......
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esthered Alucard's Lover Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Perth Posts: 352 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Fantastic!! Wow. You know what, I totally have respect for people like you who can depict sadness so wonderfully. I love it, and I assure you I totally understand the meaning of your poem. This is great stuff! :] __________________
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dark angel swordsman God of Destruction Join Date: Mar 2005 Posts: 1,839 Thanks: 1 Thanked 5 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 13,361	wow its so beautiful T.T __________________ If you're lucky, I may give you a tiny sliver of my godliness.
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Shade/K' Heart Otaku Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: I am always near... Posts: 413 Thanks: 10 Thanked 11 Times in 9 Posts Credits: 3,449	Very nice... I hope if your hurting that you get better soon. __________________ Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.
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T Elocin Newbie Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Virginia, US Posts: 92 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Gee; thanks guys! Your comments make me feel better to know that someone likes my poetry (No one at school gets me)
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Apr 21, 2005, 06:24 PM	#6 (permalink)
narrator Self Banned and Loving it Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Check the cellar.... Posts: 1,990 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 251	just keep your head up and your spirit high. very nice writing. __________________
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deidre_the_goddess AO Member Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: i came from a place no one has ever gone.. Posts: 306 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 590	nice job!!! its so nice reading your wonderful poems^_^...
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