Lyrics, or poem, whatever

-=Broken^Halo=- · Jan 10, 2005, 11:10 PM

ok so.. heres some lyrics im working on.

This life is some hopeless
a story filled with blunder
everythings clashed,
like gods rolling thunder.

I look to the skies,
as a holy curse rains,
drowning these cries,
in drenching pain.

i let my soul bleed,
and cryout to thy lord,
to forgive this greed,
and fight lucifers horde.

push them back,
a sword of light,
the gates of hell crack,
as the angels fight.

ok well, thats it. hope its not to embarrasing >.<

*Kasai* · Jan 13, 2005, 04:00 AM

That was beautiful. the poem flowed just right. Nothing seemed forced. I would actually like to read some free verse poems from you. I feel you have great talent.

Jan 10, 2005, 11:10 PM	#1 (permalink)
-=Broken^Halo=- Otaku Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Texas,USA Posts: 226 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Lyrics, or poem, whatever ok so.. heres some lyrics im working on. This life is some hopeless a story filled with blunder everythings clashed, like gods rolling thunder. I look to the skies, as a holy curse rains, drowning these cries, in drenching pain. i let my soul bleed, and cryout to thy lord, to forgive this greed, and fight lucifers horde. push them back, a sword of light, the gates of hell crack, as the angels fight. ok well, thats it. hope its not to embarrasing >.< __________________ Fr3aK~0f~N@Tu\|23
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Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	That was beautiful. the poem flowed just right. Nothing seemed forced. I would actually like to read some free verse poems from you. I feel you have great talent. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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