Ms. Independent

To Kris if you ever visit..

I'm not disappointed,
I know everything ends,
My heart is not even dented,
But now I think of how every girl wants a boyfriend,

I'm getting tired of storybooks,
They're constantly brainwashing little girls,
That love happens because of looks,
That's what they look for knights in armor and ball gowns that are impearled,

Girls still think of make believe even at seventeen,
But I think I'm an independent woman who doesn't need a man to put a smile on my face,
I can be treated as a queen,
without flowers ,candy ,or fake embraces

Love isn't the only thing in life
marriage isn't needed to show love
But a hole that falls to further strife
and that fake I love you is the first shove

Some may have it good and that's fine for them,
But I'm just here to point out that you shouldn't just take a leap,
Have a baby at sixteen and you yourself will be condemned,
As you drop out of school and abandon your life to the tears you now weep,

All I'm saying is that being alive is more important than hooking up with the first guy you meet,
All because some star did in Vegas,
But they did what you don't realize they got successful before they heard the pitter patter of little feet,
So don't be brainless,

Love isn't what you think it is all juniors have is lust,
young love is just like a phase
Love isn't a must,
That's all I'm tryin to say.

Trying to be carefull huh? Well there is a good message hidden in that poem and to be honest i liked it very well. Nice work Tithe.

It's too long i didn't even read it.

You have a good start on this poem, with some further editing this could probably win a contest.

you're good at it. Awesome really!!! keep it up!!!

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Originally Posted by lord nikon

It's too long i didn't even read it.

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then why post dumbass? no reason to post if all u say is "it's too long, i didn't even read it." wtf's the point. something as good as this deserves a better post than what u gave. i got a word of advice, don't post unless u have something decent to post. and i ain't takin the role of moderator here, i just think it's meaningless to post something like what u did.

First things first....Nikon... for the love of God please stop with the pointless posts. Enough already, cmon..... anyway....the writing is excellent, Tithe. I think its very genuine and has a lot of heart & feeling put into it. Good one :thumb:

I like the message and stuff; good poem.