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    Talking Ms. Independent

    To Kris if you ever visit..

    I'm not disappointed,
    I know everything ends,
    My heart is not even dented,
    But now I think of how every girl wants a boyfriend,

    I'm getting tired of storybooks,
    They're constantly brainwashing little girls,
    That love happens because of looks,
    That's what they look for knights in armor and ball gowns that are impearled,

    Girls still think of make believe even at seventeen,
    But I think I'm an independent woman who doesn't need a man to put a smile on my face,
    I can be treated as a queen,
    without flowers ,candy ,or fake embraces

    Love isn't the only thing in life
    marriage isn't needed to show love
    But a hole that falls to further strife
    and that fake I love you is the first shove

    Some may have it good and that's fine for them,
    But I'm just here to point out that you shouldn't just take a leap,
    Have a baby at sixteen and you yourself will be condemned,
    As you drop out of school and abandon your life to the tears you now weep,

    All I'm saying is that being alive is more important than hooking up with the first guy you meet,
    All because some star did in Vegas,
    But they did what you don't realize they got successful before they heard the pitter patter of little feet,
    So don't be brainless,

    Love isn't what you think it is all juniors have is lust,
    young love is just like a phase
    Love isn't a must,
    That's all I'm tryin to say.
    Last edited by Tithe; Apr 09, 2005 at 01:55 PM. Reason: forgot a T
    A deathless heart alive with greif
    Smiles when it hears of thee
    Whisper now my secret love
    Kiss my lips and rise above

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    Banned Kikinaki may be famous one day Kikinaki may be famous one day Kikinaki's Avatar
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    Trying to be carefull huh? Well there is a good message hidden in that poem and to be honest i liked it very well. Nice work Tithe.
    Last edited by Kikinaki; Apr 10, 2005 at 11:17 AM.

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    It's too long i didn't even read it.

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    good start

    You have a good start on this poem, with some further editing this could probably win a contest.
    En la tierra de los ciegos, el torto es rey.

    In the end, Darwin is right. The strongest do survive.
    Hail Malthus!

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    you're good at it. Awesome really!!! keep it up!!!

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    Quote Originally Posted by lord nikon
    It's too long i didn't even read it.
    then why post dumbass? no reason to post if all u say is "it's too long, i didn't even read it." wtf's the point. something as good as this deserves a better post than what u gave. i got a word of advice, don't post unless u have something decent to post. and i ain't takin the role of moderator here, i just think it's meaningless to post something like what u did.

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    First things first....Nikon... for the love of God please stop with the pointless posts. Enough already, cmon..... anyway....the writing is excellent, Tithe. I think its very genuine and has a lot of heart & feeling put into it. Good one

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    I like the message and stuff; good poem.

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