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    My Biggest Fear (Poem)

    I'm walking down the secluded road,
    and i see a pretty face.
    your kind hearted,
    and listen to my pain,
    like none before you.
    we slowly walk,
    and fall for each other,
    feeling as if we're one.
    i lean in but pause,
    and you wonder why,
    as you you finish what i started.
    the kiss more gentle,
    then a rose petal,
    and softer than silk.
    we part lips,
    then part ways,
    soon after i get your name.
    i then see a wild rose,
    and pick it and run towards you.
    but i don't see you anymore.
    i follow the only road,
    to a graveyard and i pause.
    a gravestone catches my glimse,
    and a tear breaks from my eye.
    a picture of you,
    resides on the stone...
    the date of your death today,
    and again i'm left all alone.
    i lay the rose on the grave,
    and then leave...
    so is my fate,
    or at least at times,
    so it seems......
    so grey the soul in me,
    and so numb my heart...
    ladies and gentleman,
    this is my biggest fear.

    Justin McCormick (K' Heart)

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Is this somewhat dream-like? I like the way the poem is structured. It was very creative and imaginative of you.. The way how 'you' and the 'girl' met, kissed, and parted ways. :] However, I don't really understand this poem so I can't really give a full evaluation.

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    Another love poem and again its great.

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    explination

    Quote Originally Posted by esthered
    Is this somewhat dream-like? I like the way the poem is structured. It was very creative and imaginative of you.. The way how 'you' and the 'girl' met, kissed, and parted ways. :] However, I don't really understand this poem so I can't really give a full evaluation.
    maybe this will help... it's a dream i had while daydreaming, moments before i wrote it... i dreamt of a girl that i felt was my "soul mate" long ago. In a down moment, i declined emotionally. After years of trying to find someone that cared, I ended up finding more pain, and no friends. I thought that my love might already be dead.... this poem is just an imaginary version of what i felt might happen if she isn't dead yet... that she might die soon after i meet her. i guess not everyone can understand me on the first try... oh well. I hope that helped...

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Jebus, never before have i read anything so close to my own feelings. Your like a gift telling me I'm not alone and that their are more of my kind out there..... but where.

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    another one wow like this one good AAA+++

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    If I could have my dreams come true
    These are the things I'd like to do.
    To have a cabin deep in the woods,
    And someone to share both the bad and the good.

    We'd lie by the fireplace,forever it seems,
    And share with each other our future of dreams.
    As we tire of talking,we'd snuggle up close,
    These are the times, I'd cherish the most.

    The times when I feel so close to someone,
    Who gives me such pleasure and so much fun.
    Who isn't afraid of what the future may bring,
    And share so much love, that our hearts sing.

    Sometimes I wonder will my dreams come true?
    And I ask myself, could it be with you?
    I don't have the answer, atleast not to share,
    I'm afraid if I share them, you wouldn't care.

    So, until the time comes, when the timing is right,
    I'll cherish our time everyday and night.
    And if in the future, our dreams become one,
    Then I'll know that my dreams has only begun.

    To have you beside me, through the rough seas and good,
    I know we'd make magic, I'm sure that we could.
    For you are my soul mate, I believe in my heart,
    And to get to our dreams, we must first make a start.

    So, please take my hand, and don't be afraid,
    I believe that together, our cabin will be made.
    I'll never doubt my feelings for you,
    And if you return them, all our dreams can come true.

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    oh you must be new....if you wanna post a poem create a new thread ok?

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