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    My poems

    This was after school..and i was quite moody and depressing so to say..so yea..

    Lost and Unwell

    Everyday i feel that im alone
    The days go by. My mood unknown
    Emotions all around
    Lost and Unwell

    Life is only just a dream
    Nothing is Accomplished
    Life is hell, that is my world.
    Lost and Unwell

    Everyday i wonder
    If im suppost to be here, what's my purpose?
    Days go by, i think im am just a shadow,
    Nothing to live for

    Many moods and shields i do put up
    Scared of what i may do
    Scared of what i may become
    Scared of my past, and everything

    Everyone around me, wants me to be happy
    But, how can i when im like this?
    Lost and Unwell


    ~Tears~

    Each day a decision is made.
    Fate and death unexpected.
    Everytime i shed a tear, my past slowly disappears.
    But every tear has many emotions:
    Tears of joy
    Tears of pain
    Tears of hate
    Tears of happiness
    Living with these emotions of tears inside.

    Through my years i have changed.
    And long years awaits for me for better or worse i do not know,
    All i know is i can't let my past get to me.
    I have to be strong and stand up on my own two feet.
    The tears fade away.



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    I like your poems. They're very good. they tell a story; I like that about poems.

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    Yes...very interesting indeed...its so nice to see people who write poems on this site ^^...i myself am a poem writer...but i havent in a while...needa get back into that habit >_<

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    Nice. A little suggestion though: take out the second stanza. Now make it the third. It would be a more defined pattern with "lost and unwell". Otherwise, this poem is exclusively awsome. Good job

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    I like em. Very nicely written......good stuff here

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    That's a nice poem. I'd like to write like that but eh, I'm more of writing big, long stories that won't even see the light of day because I never get to finish them -_-. Got anymore?

    Dreams die,
    Memories lost,
    And all hope is forgotten...

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    Not bad...not bad ^_^
    Instead of thinking about where you are, think about where you want to be.
    It takes twenty years of hard work to become an overnight success.

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    here's another one..



    unknown unseen

    I thought i could trust no one in this world.
    Until that very day i met you.
    Now we are happy.
    Through these long months
    I feel as if wondering if this a dream,
    is it really true?

    Living each day wishing one day i will see you.
    Until that day;
    i wish you make you happy, and lucky
    that you have me.


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