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    Notice me quick (poem)

    I'm a good person,
    I really am a heart,
    I do what I'm told,
    And I try to be smart

    But every person has their limit,
    A time when they break-down,
    Eyes burning with hate,
    With a menacing frown

    I won't listen to you,
    I'll kick, scream, and yell,
    For I'm deaf to the world,
    Meet your living he**

    I can be just as bad,
    As I can be good,
    I'm not gonna act,
    Like a good, little, girl should

    I like being evil,
    I find It quite fun,
    I'm glad I opened my eyes,
    To complete coruption

    No one notices me,
    They don't even think I exist,
    Well, I'll show you once and for all,
    That I'm tired of this

    If you still don't notice me,
    If you still don't see me as a treat,
    Well, you better notice me quick,
    Before I do something we'll both regret.

    by: T Elocin
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    This has so much emotion.
    I like your style!
    It got me thinking of lryics i wrote for a music technology class, someone wnated to use for a song but it didn't get that far. I think i called it "Alone" or something.

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    Thanks! I like feedback! Glad you like my style. And I know it has too much emotion; I was kinda PO'd when I wrote it, if you can't tell. It was just one of those days when nothing goes your way, ya know. But thanks a TON for your feedback. I really like it when people respond.

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    Very nice. Seems in this vast darkness, I can find another being after all. Great poem! Emotion is the best driving force for some, well... at least for me anyway. Keep it up!!

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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