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    Otaku MuMu Champion Shade/K' Heart may be famous one day Shade/K' Heart may be famous one day Shade/K' Heart's Avatar
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    One Day Closer To You

    One Day Closer To You

    Every day is a waste…
    Cause I’m there without you.
    I waste my time,
    And waste the work day.
    Then come home and kill more time.
    Then 7 o’ clock runs by,
    And soon after,
    I’m on the net.
    Next thing I hear is *knock knock*,
    And your screen name appears.
    I type to you,
    Tell you I love you,
    And tell you I miss you daily.
    You do the same.
    I love you more than,
    Anyone before you…
    Because there has been none before you.
    I tell you what,
    I’d do when I go there,
    And give you my all girl.
    You have no idea what you do to me,
    And how you’ve changed this man.
    All I know is the man I am now,
    Is the man that you desire.
    I love you more each and every day.
    So when I go to sleep here soon,
    And close my eyes….
    I can’t wait….
    To waste another day.

    Till I’m with you…..

    By Justin McCormick (K' Heart)

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    and i can't wait until that day that i meet you and you stay with me forever.
    LIFES NOT A GARDEN SO STOP ACTING LIKE A STUPID HOE.

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    wow dde...thats really good.

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    You are really good, honestly it's the best poem I've read so far here. Keeping in mind that I am new here. Still great work.

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    kool peom and keep it up

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    way to go dude kool poem!!!!!!!!!keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!

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    I can sense love and passion. Done nice and Easy. Its great.

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    It's very cute, real emotion! One critique I have is that it doesn't flow right. When you read it, everyline a pause between, it has no flow. Thumbs up bud, hope you get the girl! (Or you already have.. either way kicks!)

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