paper mache wings (poem)

*Tithe* · Feb 01, 2005, 05:38 PM

I worked real hard to make them
I thought I could fly
But when I jumped from that tree limb
I didn't touch the sky

Heartbroken in my corner
Tears flowing from my eyes
I felt like a foriegner
Blanketed in lies

Then all of a sudden
Something twinged
I felt my shirt unbutton
The back ripped and fringed

My back felt cold and moistened
Red and green staining my white shirt
I was floating as if hoistened
Cold liquid flowing down my skirt

Then I saw a twinkle
There were wings growing from my back!
As faery dust sprinkled
I thought now I can fly
Wings I do not lack

youth_anime_fan · Feb 01, 2005, 07:47 PM

IT RHYMES>>this poem says what it has to. very nice. Imverytired,so i give you a ten.

*Boo45* · Feb 01, 2005, 09:12 PM

I LOVE IT, ITS SO AWESOME, LOL, I FIND IT MOST ENJOYABLE, GJGJGJGJGJGJ! LoL....its very nice and it rhymes everywhere, very amazing

*narrator* · Feb 01, 2005, 11:37 PM

Touching and nicely written. Good stuff

*Gin Nightingale* · Feb 02, 2005, 03:08 AM

Nice work! Liked the image that was created in my head while reading it.

*Tithe* · Feb 02, 2005, 03:28 PM

Thanks! I hope to be a writer someday! I'm in the process of making my book.

*Ted Turtle* · Feb 02, 2005, 05:10 PM

Good job on the poem. It flowed very well.

Darkness Flame · Feb 24, 2005, 05:00 AM

WOW !!!!
I felt every word. It you're really something
Keep it up babe.

Feb 01, 2005, 05:38 PM	#1 (permalink)
Tithe Tithe Heart ^^ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a place most undesired Posts: 235 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	paper mache wings (poem) I worked real hard to make them I thought I could fly But when I jumped from that tree limb I didn't touch the sky Heartbroken in my corner Tears flowing from my eyes I felt like a foriegner Blanketed in lies Then all of a sudden Something twinged I felt my shirt unbutton The back ripped and fringed My back felt cold and moistened Red and green staining my white shirt I was floating as if hoistened Cold liquid flowing down my skirt Then I saw a twinkle There were wings growing from my back! As faery dust sprinkled I thought now I can fly Wings I do not lack __________________ A deathless heart alive with greif Smiles when it hears of thee Whisper now my secret love Kiss my lips and rise above
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Feb 01, 2005, 07:47 PM	#2 (permalink)
youth_anime_fan Devoted Otaku Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 585 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	IT RHYMES>>this poem says what it has to. very nice. Imverytired,so i give you a ten.
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Feb 01, 2005, 09:12 PM	#3 (permalink)
Boo45 PiNk HaIr FaNaTiC Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: I live in a trashcan Posts: 715 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	I LOVE IT, ITS SO AWESOME, LOL, I FIND IT MOST ENJOYABLE, GJGJGJGJGJGJ! LoL....its very nice and it rhymes everywhere, very amazing __________________ Which Final Fantasy Character Are You?
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Feb 01, 2005, 11:37 PM	#4 (permalink)
narrator Self Banned and Loving it Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Check the cellar.... Posts: 1,990 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Touching and nicely written. Good stuff __________________
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Feb 02, 2005, 03:08 AM	#5 (permalink)
Gin Nightingale The Siggeh Maker Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Somewhere between fantasy and reality Posts: 344 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Nice work! Liked the image that was created in my head while reading it. __________________ I close my eyes, wishing you were by my side But that is just wistful thinking...
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Feb 02, 2005, 03:28 PM	#6 (permalink)
Tithe Tithe Heart ^^ Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: In a place most undesired Posts: 235 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Thanks! I hope to be a writer someday! I'm in the process of making my book. __________________ A deathless heart alive with greif Smiles when it hears of thee Whisper now my secret love Kiss my lips and rise above
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Feb 02, 2005, 05:10 PM	#7 (permalink)
Ted Turtle The Sacred Wind Turtle Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Somewhere over the Rainbow Posts: 258 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Good job on the poem. It flowed very well.
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Darkness Flame Newbie Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 1 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	WOW !!!! I felt every word. It you're really something Keep it up babe.
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