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  1. May 21, 2005 12:33 PM #1
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    a poem

    a poem i've only jst came up with so bear with me.

    is this real?
    is this love i feel?
    or am i falling to my death?
    intised by your scented breath?
    am i becoming more myself?
    or am i putting me on the shelf?
    is this real?
    is this you i feel?
    in me?

    ok i know it's short, but here's something you might like, it's about you guys.
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  2. May 21, 2005 01:57 PM #2
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    ...yeah...

    I liked it,not that my opnion really matters but i liked it.Some people dislike shorter poems but i like all of them with some angst part to them

    Brent
    I am the one you all despise,
    I am The One hated by all,
    I am simply me.

    Brent
  3. May 22, 2005 01:55 PM #3
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mrs.Sesshomaru
    ...yeah...

    I liked it,not that my opnion really matters but i liked it.Some people dislike shorter poems but i like all of them with some angst part to them

    Brent
    your opinion counts to me, thanks for the input.
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  4. May 22, 2005 02:05 PM #4
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    I like it short, but the lines have meaning in them making it hard to ignore. Very cryptic and lovely...good job.

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  5. May 22, 2005 02:10 PM #5
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    It's not bad really, puncuation might have made it a tad better.
  6. May 30, 2005 02:25 PM #6
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    that ture. your opinoin count
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