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    [poem] A Broken Ankle And A Heart Of The Same Condition

    A Broken Ankle And A Heart Of The Same Condition
    by Pyro Mike

    You said you cared,
    but it came out a lie.
    You said "I love you,"
    but it was another guy.
    The only truth you've told,
    was that "Goodbye!"

    I said I cared,
    and thought you did.
    I said "I love you,"
    like a lovestruck kid.
    The only lie I told,
    was "To hell and good rid!"

    You went on a date,
    but flirted with boys.
    You tried to kiss me,
    but always made a noise.
    The only thing you were good for,
    was giving false joys.

    I went on a date,
    and I never looked away.
    I tried to kiss you,
    and watched you sway.
    The only thing I was bad for,
    was being blind till this day.

    You already knew,
    what I realized.
    You yelled,
    but me too.
    You pushed,
    and I fell.
    You left me a broken ankle,
    and a heart of the same condition.
    Last edited by Pyro Mike; Apr 28, 2005 at 05:41 PM. Reason: A typo.
    "My balls. To do with as I please."


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    very nice...good work
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    nice work i like that good job

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    Your poem has got a great rhythm to it. Good structure as well. ::applauds:: Lovely.

    Also...LOVE your title. :3

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    "When the time is right, you'll learn to love me."

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    Well, well, well so pyro mike has great passion for poems, i tought you were a tuff guy, anyways, nice poem i like it.

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    OMG! Did she really break your ankle?! Omg, anyway, VERY NICE WORK! :] I can't do better myself! I hope your ankle heals soon (if it's really broken.) and your heart will mend. Don't worry, there are lots of girls out there who will cherish you! :]

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    Its a funny story, this isn't based on anything, but I did write this after I got rejected and broke my ankle in the same day. So I thought of the title, and decided to write a poem around it.
    "My balls. To do with as I please."


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