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    -Poem- drivers seat verse1

    this was originally gonna be a song...it kinda still is

    come on girl i'll break it down,
    you know tonights out night on town.
    i know my outfit may look stupid,
    but come on girl youre my cupid.
    shoot an arrow right through my heart,
    i just want our love to start.

    whatcha think?
    (originally song)
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    Lol, it has a kind of humour sense to it, yes? I like it. It's very light-hearted and fun! I think it'll be better as a song with some guitar and drums. Not that it's not good as a poem. I love it ! Haha. It's just such a fun poem. If you know what I mean. :]

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    Its origannaly yeah, but a little short, the rest is fine.

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    sounds like your going to a party down the block?!!!
    anyway, its fine...the poem is fine...
    Last edited by deidre_the_goddess; Apr 23, 2005 at 06:06 AM.

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