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    Newbie Jess may be famous one day Jess may be famous one day
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    {poem} Take all but the shell

    Take All But The Shell

    Go now
    Leave
    Take my heart
    Take your seed

    Take the wish
    Take the hope

    Take the will
    Take the yearn

    Take it all
    Take it and leave

    Take it all
    But the shell of me

    By: Jess

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    Newbie Jess may be famous one day Jess may be famous one day
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    this is Jess and i would like it if you rated my poem ^ on a scale from one to ten if you would be so kind. Also, if i may ask, a few suggestions in how to make this one and others better. Your opinions, please. Thanks. It's much appreciated (sp).
    -Jess(not usually this polite unless asking for a favor- hence the attitude)

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    *comes out of the shadows*
    Nice I like it. I could see this is one of those poems that you can mold to multiple thing in life. like when you said "Go now leave Take my heart take your seed" you could relate that to a broken heart, or simply someone who had a baby and is tellin the other person to get the h**l outa their and take the kid with you!lol
    GOOD STUFF JESS!! 10/10
    ps thanks 4 the post!
    *seeps into the shadows*

    *GIVE UP THE POCKY!!!*

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    Very nice. 10/10. Such emotion in the poems can tear at a person's soul. My poems are light hearted too often, so I rarely post something like this. I need to apply more emotion in mine. Keep up the good work.

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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