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    [Poem] Triangle

    first one in a while

    -jake
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    with piano in my ear
    my head screams
    wanting to tell the world
    to show it a way

    i have nothing to say
    no expression
    simple thoughts
    no depression
    looming memories of painful days
    eyes close
    images in the haze
    the porcelain collects my piss
    i fush it down
    i make a wish

    i read the opinions of those a head
    i cry for them
    in my bed
    nothing to gain
    from pain
    and crys
    of those innocent
    lives
    and you ask why

    keep asking
    until the end
    like a curious child
    wondering way back when
    why the sky?
    why the world?
    why the lights?
    why the pearl?

    don't ask your parents
    don't ask your peers
    wait for those moments
    when the answer's in your ears
    nobody will be speakin
    nobody will be alive
    you'll be alone and sinkin'
    your memories collide

    total light
    total loss
    complete silence
    in your thoughts

    there
    i said it
    the answers all there
    language nothing
    you hear it in your fears
    no
    no dimention
    to the message
    just shape
    a figure
    a rhyme without a single word
    just mixed up

    word

    deconstruction d
    construction e
    struction c
    tion o
    Noit n
    Noitcurst s
    Noitcurstnoc t
    Noitcurstnoced r

    wait....
    you forgot the letters
    nothing equal.

    math
    that's how I'll prove it
    show a blind man the triangle
    he'll draw it without looking
    no seriously

    you don't know the trouble I've taken
    to show you
    you
    yo
    u
    ou
    ouy

    There it is again!
    the same trick
    get a pen!

    write it down.
    think again!

    have it yet?
    no
    it's simple
    ok
    let's try again

    i see the fog overhead
    and after the rain
    i see it everywhere
    those reflections
    of the faces
    people going place
    in there hearts they see
    the reality
    of senses
    of answers
    to the why
    asked with voices
    heard with ears
    interpreted by their peers
    it's that misdirection
    the stop sign on the road
    that keeps us waiting
    that keeps us cold.

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    its very good, but like i said to the most its too long, well thats my opinoin, the rest was cool.

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    Interesting. Many many lines. Longggg. Good though a 9. might of been a ten if it were shorter.
    Looking forward to Burst Angel Vol. 3

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    Thanks. Had I written the version that really expressed everything needed to express it would have taken a few novels.

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    Quote Originally Posted by jao
    Thanks. Had I written the version that really expressed everything needed to express it would have taken a few novels.
    Lol. I guess there is much to express with you i like that. PM me sometime i am always open for new friends.
    Looking forward to Burst Angel Vol. 3

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    i enjoyed it very much .u have a very unique style thats a combo of many froms of poetry .nicely written{poems can never be too long}
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