its very good, but like i said to the most its too long, well thats my opinoin, the rest was cool.
first one in a while
-jake
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with piano in my ear
my head screams
wanting to tell the world
to show it a way
i have nothing to say
no expression
simple thoughts
no depression
looming memories of painful days
eyes close
images in the haze
the porcelain collects my piss
i fush it down
i make a wish
i read the opinions of those a head
i cry for them
in my bed
nothing to gain
from pain
and crys
of those innocent
lives
and you ask why
keep asking
until the end
like a curious child
wondering way back when
why the sky?
why the world?
why the lights?
why the pearl?
don't ask your parents
don't ask your peers
wait for those moments
when the answer's in your ears
nobody will be speakin
nobody will be alive
you'll be alone and sinkin'
your memories collide
total light
total loss
complete silence
in your thoughts
there
i said it
the answers all there
language nothing
you hear it in your fears
no
no dimention
to the message
just shape
a figure
a rhyme without a single word
just mixed up
word
deconstruction d
construction e
struction c
tion o
Noit n
Noitcurst s
Noitcurstnoc t
Noitcurstnoced r
wait....
you forgot the letters
nothing equal.
math
that's how I'll prove it
show a blind man the triangle
he'll draw it without looking
no seriously
you don't know the trouble I've taken
to show you
you
yo
u
ou
ouy
There it is again!
the same trick
get a pen!
write it down.
think again!
have it yet?
no
it's simple
ok
let's try again
i see the fog overhead
and after the rain
i see it everywhere
those reflections
of the faces
people going place
in there hearts they see
the reality
of senses
of answers
to the why
asked with voices
heard with ears
interpreted by their peers
it's that misdirection
the stop sign on the road
that keeps us waiting
that keeps us cold.
its very good, but like i said to the most its too long, well thats my opinoin, the rest was cool.
Interesting. Many many lines. Longggg. Good though a 9. might of been a ten if it were shorter.
Looking forward to Burst Angel Vol. 3
Thanks. Had I written the version that really expressed everything needed to express it would have taken a few novels.
Lol. I guess there is much to express with you i like that. PM me sometime i am always open for new friends.Originally Posted by jao
Looking forward to Burst Angel Vol. 3
i enjoyed it very much .u have a very unique style thats a combo of many froms of poetry .nicely written{poems can never be too long}
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