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    POEM: True Self

    Here is one of the older poems I've have written. I had it posted on another forum, and got some surprising comments. It was the first of my poems to go public. I was terrorfied until people started posting their thoughts about it. See, I have always thought my work was good, but feared others would hate it. Please tell me your thoughts about this poem.

    True Self

    Long ago I began to wear a mask,
    One of happiness and joy.
    And for years it has fulfilled it's task,
    Protecting a vulnerable young boy.

    That youth has long since grown,
    True self locked deep within.
    Who I really am completely unknown,
    Unable to fit in even a life of sin.

    A mask once protecting now is a prison,
    And I've been trapped for quite some time.
    Often facing sorrow painted crimson,
    And my true self only appearing in ryhme.

    Oh, how I long for someone to know me,
    Wanting in because they're sincerely caring.
    So my true self can come to be,
    My hidden side, the one appearing.

    But none know what's written among this book's pages,
    No one willing to look past this book's cover.
    A soul imprisoned like so many a bird trapped in cages,
    No one seeing this tale soar and hover.

    But my silent pleas go unheard,
    No one willing to care enough to discover who I truely am.
    So I try to carry on,
    Completely unknown and alone.

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    Re: POEM: True Self

    Wow thats good and what exactlyis your av?

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    Re: POEM: True Self

    Cool. i think it was nice, and true. Me likes.
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    Re: POEM: True Self

    COOL.....true self...nc tittle!

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    Re: POEM: True Self

    *applause* i'm impressed! love the poem!

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    Re: POEM: True Self

    oOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO totally Emo I love it!

    Haha okey I was just being silly right there sorry..hehe Thats just me.

    But really, It is an awsome poem...and defintely sounds from the heart.
    And if it is from your heart then I hope your next poem will be about finding your true self and letting someone in and being free.
    The best poems are the ones from your heart and your feelings...cuz those are the most real and those are the ones that get to everyone else that is going through similar situations.
    Keep up the good work my friend.^^

    Thanks Pyroo. :]

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