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    Question Poem- Underneath It All

    Underneath it all
    I get past the cruel jokes and the ridicule
    I return positive energy and redirect the negative
    Underneath it all
    I get past all the hurtful things thrown my way
    I help those who are in the same situation as I

    Underneath it all
    I am the light of others optimism and hope
    I give them all that I have
    Underneath it all
    I cry alone while no one watches
    I take it upon myself to ease the pain of others

    Underneath it all
    I get past the hurtful things said and done to me
    I take it upon myself to ease the pain of others
    Underneath it all
    I cry alone while no one watches
    I help those who are in the same situation as I

    Underneath it all
    I am the light of others optimism and hope
    Underneath it all
    I give them all that I have
    Underneath it all
    I am who I am as I try helping others
    Underneath it all
    "I'm at your service master and/or mistress." *Bows to you in respect*

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    I like this poem it kinda says what we are all thinking(well at least me). Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
    This pain is sratching at my bone.
    And this Loneliness won't leave me alone.

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    Ehh.....I see why you said "Underneath it all" so many times, but like I said before, the style just bothers me. And I didn't really see the emotion. Not bad though.

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    agreed with sasaumi, but seems like you have a happy personality, and thats good
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    kanna it was kool keep up with the good work

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