I appluad your cryptic lines. My favorite part was:
I don't see myself "here" anymore,
I see it in another place.
the pain i have cannot follow me to this place...
and this place is where I'll stay till I die.
I can relate to that in particular. I personaly think that the majority of people could relate to the poem. I wonder if this poem was written from your heart not creativity, this poem shows raw emotions of everyday people.