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    Elie Jelly elie26 may be famous one day elie26 may be famous one day elie26's Avatar
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    Savior

    Upon my shoulder
    I carry a weight
    That haunts me everyday in my dream
    I struggle to break free from it
    But every time I do it seems
    That it clings harder on to me

    Little by little it consumes part of my soul
    Till I’m left with what’s left of it
    I feel tired, weak and cold
    Oh god, help me!
    I have a hole
    A hole that’s needs to be replaced
    Or suffer from what I’m most afraid

    Loneliness
    Depression
    I know you well
    You feed on me when I’m all alone

    Then suddenly a bright light appeared
    Like an angel from the clouds
    I looked up expectantly
    Hoping it’s a blessing from up above
    The light brightens, the person is revealed
    Who might that person be?

    Dressed in normal average clothes
    Staring at me with her soft blue eyes
    Making me feel so alive
    She smiled at me and flowers bloomed
    Tress grew and birds singed
    I felt warm again and oh so free
    Free from whatever that’s haunting me
    I could dance and jump and hop around
    I could spread my invisible wings and fly away

    I suddenly realized that life can be
    Filled with such happiness, joy and cheer

    Thank you my savior
    Thank you for rescuing me
    I’ve never appreciated life
    I never did
    You showed me a way
    You taught me how
    You shall forever be in my heart
    A special person I shall cherish for now and all eternity

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    Re: Savior

    Touching ... awesome Elie ^_^ You're talented!

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    Re: Savior

    I see from your eyes
    How much you desire
    How much you care
    Oh daring light
    I give my life to this splendid one.....
    Why can't you be my soul and heart.....

    Very nice..... I'm impressed.....
    Glad you be a good poet.....

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    Re: Savior

    Quote Originally Posted by SousukeSagara
    I see from your eyes
    How much you desire
    How much you care
    Oh daring light
    I give my life to this splendid one.....
    Why can't you be my soul and heart.....

    Very nice..... I'm impressed.....
    Glad you be a good poet.....
    lol....u can also write! cool...........

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    Re: Savior

    lol your poem is really kool, i have been reading many poems, but so far i haven't read a poem as good as yours, keep up the good work.

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    Re: Savior

    Touching...... i wish i had a angel who can show me the way.. but good job on your peom

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    Re: Savior

    Oh that was great. You now just how to write it. How do you think of this stuff.
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    Re: Savior

    Nice elie, very touching. Can I ask wut was ur inspiration for this poem?

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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