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    Shattered Dreams

    Shattered Dreams

    When i dream
    Tears fall from the sky
    Darkness closes around me
    Nightmare take my mind
    My lover always dies
    My heart left torn
    Is this how love is
    Why is it so cruel
    When i dream
    My heart fills with joy
    a guy really likes me
    i can see love in his eyes
    But the nightmare goes on
    and he is taken from my world
    The world thats in my dreams
    Where a heart cant be whole
    This is the nightmare i live in
    this is my home
    where hearts are left shattered
    a place where everyone's alone.
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    In the beginning, the universe was created. This made a lot of people very angry, and has been widely regarded as a bad idea

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    I think there should spaces after stanzas. It brings out the emotion more. Great job though.
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