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    Commander Ham Chiefblackhammer is making a name for themselves Chiefblackhammer is making a name for themselves Chiefblackhammer is making a name for themselves Chiefblackhammer's Avatar
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    Silent Goodbyes

    I feel the coldness of your eyes,
    Running through me like a million knives,
    Screaming their silent goodbyes.

    As leaves fall from the trees
    Like a gentle autumn breeze,
    Piercing to the depths of me,

    Oh lover of my soul,
    Where did our passion go,
    Frigid now as the snow.

    How are we not meant to be,
    Torn apart by love’s raging sea,
    Where was I when you stopped loving me.

    We could do no wrong,
    Yet it fades as a distant song,
    Beaten by another’s throng.

    From my love you flea,
    How could I not see,
    You never wanted us to be.

    I was too lost in all the lies,
    Too mesmerized by your eyes
    To hear the sighs, rattles and cries.

    Assiduously kissed with death’s seal,
    I have lost the will,
    But I cannot change the way I feel.

    You’re so willing to depart,
    Refusing the calling of my heart,
    How can I obtain my mark.

    When your love you will not show,
    Rather sorrow you bestow,
    How much longer can I go.

    With tears falling from my cheeks,
    The moments turn to weeks,
    Still a wayward lover my soul seeks.

    It takes me to the depths of hell,
    Steals the wind from my sails,
    Pushing me harder yet to no avail.

    As our relationship slowly dies,
    I stand there, arms stretched wide,
    Yet your eyes scream silent goodbyes.

    ~BCM~


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    Re: Silent Goodbyes

    WOW! *lost of thought*......................... that was great.
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    Re: Silent Goodbyes

    Wow! Chief-Sami, I was able to actually feel and see through the words and form mental images of your poem!!! Such beautiful details! I love it, Chief-Sami. Ah, I have a question. What made you compose this piece?

    Oh yes, post more of your works, if you have them, please.

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    Re: Silent Goodbyes

    speahless dude. damn that is a beautiful peace. plz make more if it is not to moch of a problem

    IM BACK

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    Re: Silent Goodbyes

    Actually I was talking with a friend that writes poetry and she had written a piece and wanted my help forming it, I wrote this as an example of how to use imagery in your words (as it makes the reader feel more in touch with the words of the speaker).

    Thank you all very much for your praise!


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    Re: Silent Goodbyes

    o.O arent u talented? i luv it....

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    that was a great poem! i really liked it! that's awesome!

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