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    PiNk HaIr FaNaTiC Boo45 may be famous one day Boo45 may be famous one day Boo45's Avatar
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    Sweet Sweet BAby

    Sweet sweet bAby
    Woncthu be my Hercules
    lookin good o so fine
    u know you are on my mind
    Now time to make some love
    Give me strength from thee above
    Sweet sweet bAby
    o so playful and so free
    after makin love with me
    y not be part of my family tree
    It'll be so much fun
    y not be my special hun
    Lets have fun and frolick in the sun
    Don't be flat like someones bun =P
    Sweet sweet bAby
    y not forever come and stay with me? =P

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    Last edited by Boo45; Jan 24, 2005 at 07:34 PM.

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    Boo! Changing your writing style? -sigh- Try not to use slang words. Atleast in this poem. Or was it meant to be funny? If it wasnt, sometimes it's better with the correct word.

    And the rhyming seems a bit forced. And it should be spaced out. -stops herself-

    Great job! *huggles*
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    LoL...thnx but i got really lazy yesterday and was like...havin a bad day typing so...yea...kinda hard...and yea it was supposed to be meant to be funny

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    I knew it was meant to be funny!!!!

    I was hoping so. Lol.
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