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    An Untitled Poem by Derek Edmonds

    It's amazing how we choose to live
    Despite the pain and suffering
    It's funny how we like to think
    That it must get better soon...
    Perhaps it will, but I can't see it
    I can't see beyond the pain
    Would death really be so bad?
    Wouldn't it bring sweet relief?
    But no, I cannot dwell on this,
    Can't waste my life so selfishly
    And so I choose to live this life
    And hope with all the rest...

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    A little darker than my usual stuff, but it can't be helped. I don't know if the poem's message is that life is futile, or that people are all dilusional, or that I'm just really depressed right now. Prolly the latter, but the first two options are possible, I suppose...

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    Actually, i like it! it proposes a great question which i ask myself everyday, but, i normally find myself upon the same conclusion though. I also often wonder if i'm the only one who ponders life and death. Maybe its just a me thing, because i think that usually if you ponder life and death your in like a depressed state(maybe not sure) but i mean i like think about it everyday. OH,And that day i learned someone in my school died, so young, scared the crap out of me!I never knew that girl, but to know that someone could just drop dead so young, almost at my age, it really scared me; when you hear about that stuff on the news and stuff its not really important, but when it happens in your own area... anyway, i'm rambling again. nice stuff, keep it up.

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    Good stuff. It brings up some very solid points and i think you handled that nicely

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    Truth about death, you'll find out when I die, since death is enevitable im in no hurry to get there.

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    i love the way u used questions to make it so much deeper like it pretains to everyone...poems like this should really get ppl thinking...nice work
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