I haven't been on for a while cause I've been grounded but my mom finally said i can get on but i'm still grounded. just thought i'd say something in case anyone was wondering. Nevermind, no one probably even noticed I was gone... but thats ok. Anyway, getting to the point- here's a poem I made. for some reason i was so proud that i wrote it- but lets see what you guys think.
I went outside one night
The moon my only light
And as I looked up; I thoght that I would cry
There was a young woman falling from the sky
Her head slightly cocked
Her eyes wide and shocked
Her face was so pale
But it told me her tale
"I'm lost within a hopeless haze"
Cried her mindless gaze
With no more dreams to follow
She fell-completely hollow
Full of sorrow and regret
I felt as if we'd met
Dressed in silk and lace
A fatal fall from grace
And to my horror, I relized she was me
How could this be?
Before I had another thought
I found the answer that i sought
My world began to fade
And i found myself within night's shade
Falling through the sky
The clouds speeding by
My laced pajamas streaming out
I could not move; I could not shout
I tried to warn the me below
But she stood; transfixed by the show
I already knew it was too late
How'd I get stuck with such a horrible fate?
So manyy things I wanted to do
But I had no more dreams to follow me through
I watched helpless as she disappeared;
The cold hard stone readily neared
I felt so empty deep inside
And there was nothing to break my vertical stride
Tears sparkling all around
I awaited my death into the ground
I closed my eyes and ceased to cry
Cause when there's nothing left, your not afriad to die.
You should be proud of that poem, because it was great! It sounded cool on the first read, and now that I've reread it a few times to make sure I get it, I like it even more.
LOL! thanx. I had fun writing it. Thanks for the feedback.
Very Nice Indeed. That is worth reading again and again. It painted a beautiful picture in my mind, and when you've do that, you've done more than most. Great job again.
Thanks. its a dream I had. It was so strange, i just had to write about it. I dream about really weird stuff. but i can never figure out what it means. Kinda strange but, I can't control my mind. anyway thanks a lot. Its my fav poem i've written so far.