Waltz of the Starry Sky (Peom)

Japanese\Romanji :
Yoru wa murasaki namida ga furu
Watashi no kawari ni sora ga naku no

Yoru wa gunjou hoshi ga furu
Watashi no kawari ni tsuki ga utau no

English :
Tears fall from the purple night sky above
The sky cries on my behalf

Stars fall from the ultramarine night sky above
The moon sings on my behalf

this peom is form my lasted wall Waltz of the Starry Sky, can you tell me what think ?

thank for reading