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    i told you
    id never tell you what you want
    unless it was the truth
    ............................................
    she walked in
    slowly and delicately
    sundress on
    make up made up
    i know we were just friends
    i know you dont care about me
    and "i dont love you"
    or at least thats what i said
    there was a burning in me
    as you looked at her
    and told me how beautiful she was
    i said
    "thats not what you want"
    you made eye contact and
    she walked over
    "baby, thats not what you want"
    she didnt even say hello
    just left her number
    and said shed be home in 10 minuets
    "baby listen, thats not what you want"
    i said again
    you asked if you could meet her there
    she told you yes
    and you began to leave
    "baby listen please, thats not what you want!!!!"
    i screamed
    she ran back in to call someone and you came with her
    you held her now
    "baby i love you and i dont want you hurt
    move out of the way of a broken heart!!!!"
    you stepped to the right
    and i shot her
    her heart shattered like clay
    and a piece fell at your feet
    "baby im sorry", i say,
    "but you dont want her"
    you left me there
    with a note
    that read

    "baby i love you,
    and im not what
    you want, i promised
    never to say that
    unless it was the truth."
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    That is ****ing beautiful. I love it. Seriously is it great I hope you write more like it because I've never read anything like it.
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    Epic, but damned gorgeous. Very nice job

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    Well, it has a nice story to it, however, the whole baby thing, was just too much.

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    cool poem keep it up !!^^!!

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    hehe thx!! its more of a story like thing! ive writen tons of them, but didnt know if they were ok or not so i thought id try it out on all of you!! oh and about the baby thing....i was talkin about my friend dean and his ex cece but he has always called me baby and i him...so thats where thats from.tehe!!

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    Very well written. It has a good ring 2 it.
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    Yes; its fantastic! Wonderfully written origonal and great story to it ! awsome job; You really should write more like this
    "I never stopped loving you, I just stopped letting it show."
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