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    2 girls (what to do?)

    All she has to do...
    ...Is tell you that she needs you.
    And, no matter how she hurt you,
    You'd go running back.

    What does she have to do?
    She could never love you more.
    Still, shes just dirt apon your floor.
    And so she slips through the cracks.

    All she has to do...
    ... Is know exactly what to flaunt.
    Just so she gets what she wants,
    And she can keep you on a string.

    And there's some things she wont do.
    She has to draw a line.
    She has to grow a spine.
    'Cause she cant take another fling.

    There isnt much she needs to do.
    Because you hold on so tightly.
    She moves her finger slightly,
    And she can always make you dance.

    Theres nothing more that she can do.
    Shes paid quite the cost.
    To realize that she lost,
    And, she no longer has a chance.


    Note: this is old, just thought I'd post it .
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    Re: 2 girls (what to do?)

    Nice... very interesting... Ok, I like it very much! It's very cool- the way you describe these two girls- so very different they are and his feelings to them just oposite of what he should feel- this happens very often in life, that's why I love it so much- you've managed to describe it so that I feel like I've been there and seen it happen, though this has never happened around me... It's great!!!

    A wonderful work,good even it's old (my old ones are so childish you'd laugh)- very cool! ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: 2 girls (what to do?)

    yeah, I dunno. Its not one of my favorites.... Mainly because when I re-read it, I think I've made it confusing by not clearly defining which girl is which. But I suppose the difference in scenarios should be enough to clarify.
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    Re: 2 girls (what to do?)

    I like this one.(yay for objectivity) I like the way it's worded and written. But I agree, I did get a little confused as to who was who at one point but it only lasted for a tad and then i knew who was who again.

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    Re: 2 girls (what to do?)

    You like this one? Damn, I donno weather to be flattered, surprised, or utterly defeated. Im mean, I'd like it too if I knew I had the upper hand.
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    Re: 2 girls (what to do?)

    That's because you look at it like that. I can tell you I certianly don't feel like I have the upper hand in anything. But I don't expect you to understand my side of anything. I do however understand, in a small way anyways, your side of it. And just because I don't agree with your point of view on a personal level doesn't change the talent in the writing. It was good.

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    Re: 2 girls (what to do?)

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    That's because you look at it like that. I can tell you I certianly don't feel like I have the upper hand in anything. But I don't expect you to understand my side of anything. I do however understand, in a small way anyways, your side of it. And just because I don't agree with your point of view on a personal level doesn't change the talent in the writing. It was good.
    I uderstood it was a compliment. I guess I just didn't expect you to compliment my confusion pertaining to... well... you know.
    Either way, I am flattered that you like it, so I suppose instead of questioning you... The gracious thing to do would be... say:

    THANK YOU.
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    Re: 2 girls (what to do?)

    No problem. Most of your work is great if not brilliant. I sometimes just don't have it in me to comment on them. But this was too good not to. Your a fantastic writer. So your welcome, it was a well diserved compliment.

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