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    2 short and sweet poems

    He gives me a flower
    A promise of return
    The flower starts to open
    It's petals slowly turn to the sun
    They bend back like dancers,
    Opening as if trying to hug the whole sky
    Then slowly fall
    one
    by
    one
    The flower cries it's tears littering by bed

    He gave me a flower
    A promise unkept.



    This one sounds more like a saying

    For love unsaid for love untold
    The heart grows hard the heart grows cold
    For love untold for love unsaid
    The heart shriveled the heart turns dead.
    every rose has a thorn

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    Re: 2 short and sweet poems

    Cool poems. ur right though, the 2nd does sound more like a saying. I luv the comparison between the flower and the promise. it died so the meaning in the promise died as well? I like the last line, "The flower cries it's tears littering by bed"
    Life's short so have a laugh about it

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    Re: 2 short and sweet poems

    sweet and short like you said, youve got skills my little freind. i hope that you keep it up, cause you got a fan here till the end
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    Re: 2 short and sweet poems

    buddie! i love them! there so cool! u should write more!

    IN THE END IT DOSENT EVEN MATTER

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    Re: 2 short and sweet poems

    Thank you. I have a poem about a leaf and now a flower. maybe i should just go outside and see waht else i can make a poem on.
    every rose has a thorn

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    Re: 2 short and sweet poems

    I use to write poems on things I saw at night. ^_^

    I like the symbolism you used with the flower to a promise. I myself am not good at using one thing to symbolize another. so I give you a thumbs up! Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more. ^_^

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    Re: 2 short and sweet poems

    I really liked the first poem, sangogirl! It was very nice! So true too, T.T This part however didn't seem to click with me:

    The flower cries it's tears littering by bed
    I don't know... I just didn't really get it. But the poem overall was quite enjoyable! Nice work, SG! Continue writing!

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    Re: 2 short and sweet poems

    well i do hope you make more sangogirl, theyve all been so nice so far.
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